Wednesday, May 9, 2012

So in this last chapter, chapter 35 I believe, I originally had them kiss, but decided to omit that part. I found a fan-fiction called 'A Man Can Change' that is strikingly similar to my story, and I intended for them to get together, but I really didn't want to copy, so I changed it. The kiss went like this, for those of you wondering:
His upper half was healed, or at least moderately, and he had no problems wrapping his arms around her and pulling her closer to him. She lay on top of him easily, their weight pressed together as if they were merging, their lips moving with a blaze across each other. Their veins were set alight with flames so intense no water could douse; it was as if the liquid coarsing through their bodies was Fiendfyre. His fingers massaged little circles into her waist, the lower portion of her back, and his cold fingers were relief on her flushed skin. She brought her hand up to caress his cheek, and her warmth on his coolness was relief to him from a never-ending snowstorm. Their temperatures, their mouths and their minds joined together, and Hermione was dead certain that everything she was feeling, he was feeling, too. His tongue traced the upper portion of her lower lip, and hers the reciprocal, and they eventually met to do battle. Hermione's limbs were turning to jelly, her mouth was dancing with flavors never experienced before, his scent distracted her as the aroma filled her nose and his eyes meeting hers were as if the chocolate in her eyes and the steel in his were combined into a ball; sweet and strong at the same time, a symphony of perfection.
Isn't that such a cute kiss? Naw, cute's not the word... more like HOT!!!
So, you guys should totally check out 'A Man Can Change'. It's beautifully written, but, I advise the um... *cough cough "adult" cough*... readers only, IF you catch my drift :)

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